02-10-2013, 10:11 PM
Thank you for your feedback, Kreative
I really like your idea about adding "lush" to that line; I don't know why I didn't think of that myself. I'll make an edit once I've finished replying to comments.
Thank you for your feedback, Stalker I chose "ascending" because the narrator's still living and growing, he's just doing so with a gun in his pocket. "Our" means the human side. I'll just delete the "side" after "other"; thanks again.
I really like your idea about adding "lush" to that line; I don't know why I didn't think of that myself. I'll make an edit once I've finished replying to comments.Thank you for your feedback, Stalker
I chose "ascending" because the narrator's still living and growing, he's just doing so with a gun in his pocket. "Our" means the human side. I'll just delete the "side" after "other"; thanks again.
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