02-10-2013, 01:31 PM
I new to this but I really liked this poem.(I'm into suicide for some reason.) I must say that, as brandontoh said, the green is misleading and kind of confusing. Before reading your comment I was lost in the meaning behind your choice of words, but after reading your comment, then reading it again, I feel a little bit stupid for not realizing its symbolism.
Perhaps "All that is lush and green and provoking and painful" would help with the confusion, and I kind of like when poems bend the rules of English, like with using "and" like that.
Overall good, lackluster wouldn't be the word I used to describe it, suicide can be viewed different ways, again, I really love this.
Perhaps "All that is lush and green and provoking and painful" would help with the confusion, and I kind of like when poems bend the rules of English, like with using "and" like that.
Overall good, lackluster wouldn't be the word I used to describe it, suicide can be viewed different ways, again, I really love this.