From The Cliffs.

From The Cliffs.

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#21

02-07-2013, 09:10 PM

The anchor lost, the boat's keel broke
upon the granite, splintered oak.You have chosen to leave this and I don't blsame you....but if you want strict crit you should have a stop after "broke" OR change "splintered" to splintering...Oh....I said that before. Sorry. It must be true!

why? I simply cannot understand what you think is wrong with ' splintered'

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From The Cliffs. - by billy - 01-31-2013, 07:40 AM

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RE: From The Cliffs. - by shemthepenman - 02-01-2013, 06:41 AM

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RE: From The Cliffs. - by Keith - 02-01-2013, 08:28 AM

RE: From The Cliffs. - by shemthepenman - 02-01-2013, 09:28 AM

RE: From The Cliffs. - by Mr. Shankly - 02-01-2013, 06:12 PM