From The Cliffs.

[tectak]

The mainsail died, I saw it rip,
dread spread like scurvy through the ship.
It cut the rope that held the clothstill don't know what the "it" refers to
which dropped the tatters to the froth.Comma here
All white and roaring o'er the decksemi-colon
a misplaced foot, a broken neck.

The anchor lost, the boat's keel broke
upon the granite, splintered oak.You have chosen to leave this and I don't blame you....but if you want strict crit you should have a stop after "broke" OR change "splintered" to splintering...Oh....I said that before. Sorry. It must be true!
Some jumped too late, some leapt too soon
their buckled bodies smashed and strewn.
Across the knife-edged rocks they lay
undone and bloodied in the spray.

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very small 2nd edit

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VERY, VERY GOOD, BILLY
Best,
tectak

The mainsail died, I saw it rip
dread ran like scurvy through the ship;
it cut the rope that held the cloth
then dropped the tatters to the froth
all white and roaring o'er the deck,
a misplaced foot, a broken neck.

The anchor lost, the boat's keel broke
upon the granite, splintered oak.
Some jumped too late, some leapt too soon
their buckled bodies, smashed and strewn.
Across the knife-edged rocks they lay
undone and bloodied in the spray.

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1st edit.
thanks to all the feedback, i've used some of the suggestion given and appreciated all the ones received. thanks

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original

The mainsail died, they heard it rip
dread ran like scurvy through the ship.
They cut the rope that held the cloth
and dropped the tatters to the froth;
all white and roaring o'er the deck,
a misplaced foot would break a neck.

The anchor lost, the boat's heart broke
upon the granite, splintered oak.
Some jumped too late, some leapt too soon
their buckled bodies bent and strewn
across the knife-edged rocks they lay
all cut and bloodied in the spray.