02-07-2013, 06:30 AM
After a couple of reads it feels like the poem's about an elderly, bedridden woman being molested by a nursing home worker, or maybe she's simply reflecting on former sexual exploits. A lot more clarification is needed. Who, for instance, is "the physicist"? There's a few nice phrases and observations though, like the mention of PVC and the fourth verse, which in its listing of words feels like a life rushing before your eyes. Critique is JMHO. Thank you for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe

