To Kathy

[brandontoh]

Thanks Billy! Greatly appreciated! Is this edit better? =x

Dusk got coloured
Into ballad.
Streetlamps highlight
Trembling eyes,
Quivering lips.
Quiet hums of nature
Sounding defences coming down.

I think the problem is that it's a little too impersonal. Does it come off that way? The whole poem, I mean.