Gone

[brandontoh]

Welcome to the Pig Pen! =) First of all, do include punctuation into your poetry. This helps with pacing and also introduce appropriate pauses. It'll make your poems flow better, and be easier on the eye. Secondly, try to break things into different stanzas so your imageries can be clearer and once again, pacing will be better.

I know what I want now -- 'Now' can be removed.
After you told me that I'm the best -- 'After' can be removed.
I tell you this 
As nicely as words can be -- This line is an attempt at clever wordplay, but it doesn't really quite work in my opinion. As nicely as words can be? How nice is that, exactly. I'd go for something like 'Placate what the mind suggests'. Basically, you want to build imagery, but it has to make sense. I'm quite certain you're not going for the abstract.
But the blind don't hear the truth  -- This line too, is another attempt at wordplay that just falls flat. It doesn't work because it doesn't make sense. For a line like this, you need to build it up amply first so there's a link to the imagery or the poem.
Pain is all I know -- This is cliche, but at least it makes sense.
How can I blame 
The same situation on you
When I'm living proof
That change is just a word 
Looking at your skeleton now 
Reminds me of all I lack
You mirror my insecurities -- It's cliche from the pain line all the way to here, but from the next line on it's something different.
But live them so much better 
Contentment in failure 
I must one day learn 
If I continue down this spiral
I will meet you at the bottom -- This is the one imagery in the poem that works. Not coincidentally it's also the best part of the poem. However, a big problem so far is the wording. The way you choose your words leave the whole tone very formal and very impersonal. Your poem doesn't elicit emotions. It's a problem of word choice here, which you'll get better at as you write more. Most of the lines do have the personal touch to it, but lines like 'I must one day learn' and 'I'm jealous at the thought' etc. are lines that pull readers away from the personal voice this poem should have.
You wear it so well 
And I'm jealous at the thought
I change my spots 
But still don't blend into this 
I have hope for me yet 
That one day ill be me 
That this world needs me
More than I ever needed you  -- Darn. You ended off with another cliche. No worries. Hope to see more from you, honestly. =) You know how to approach poems with a very personal voice, though some lines do require some rewording, and you do seem new to poetry. Remember that my feedback is all personal opinion, and ponder upon them, take what you will then discard the rest. Hope I'm of help, and thanks for the read! =)