I, too, am curious regarding the kind of critique you're looking for. If it's spoken word then why would you say "I guess I'm writing this to get over you..."? I can't really imagine this being performed, if I'm honest. Even poetry that's written purely as spoken word tends to employ some poetic devices rather than a series of diary-like confessions.
Sorry, I'm sure it's heartfelt but that's not enough to make it a good poem, if indeed it can be seen as a poem at all.
Sorry, I'm sure it's heartfelt but that's not enough to make it a good poem, if indeed it can be seen as a poem at all.
It could be worse