02-04-2013, 04:29 AM
"Drawn by a force unseen. Running over her defilement."
Lines like that it the prose seem too stiff. It doesn't run smoothly when it comes to those sort of lines. Do you get that feeling? If you do, do you feel it about any of the other lines in it? It has enough good content to make a smooth prose poem.
Lines like that it the prose seem too stiff. It doesn't run smoothly when it comes to those sort of lines. Do you get that feeling? If you do, do you feel it about any of the other lines in it? It has enough good content to make a smooth prose poem.