02-03-2013, 01:50 PM
Though the meter's probably better in your edit it was the first version I read and I was slightly confused by the third line, which is a lot clearer (to me) in the original. Just a thought. This is an amusing limerick which those who read poetry, both amateur and professional, will enjoy more, I think. It's very witty in the way it eschews traditional form while claiming it can afford to be terse; I also like how the narrator says that common dialect has escaped his head, when really he's using it to write his limerick. Certainly there's not much of an "obscure lexicon" here. Thank you for the read
"We believe that we invent symbols. The truth is that they invent us; we are their creatures, shaped by their hard, defining edges." - Gene Wolfe

