Gone but not forgotten

[Jae Mc Donnell]

Hi Kelseymclemore, and welcome.
For me the poem is nice. Not lots going on and a bit cliché. But I don't care, It's nice,and I'm fine with that

I gave him this coin, told him never to forget. Maybe a comma after told him or quotation marks around never forget and lose to
He gave it right back, said he didn't need it.
He could remember it all,
from the think to the thin, lose first the
the good to the bad,
the start to the end. change the to and
Forced to keep this coin, I see it from time to time. Put two parts on seperate lines smae with first and second line
It reminds me of his memory,
so sweet and devine.
Sometimes I find my self picking it up,
holding it tight, and wishing him luck. I like the end, nice.

I hope this helps