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From The Cliffs.
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02-01-2013, 06:12 PM
The pace of the poem fits well with the action described. That being said, it does seem to take away from the overall pungency of each individual line. Use of the pronoun "they" was mentioned. I would tend to agree that a name or word more closely denoting humans (crew? sailors? etc) might be preferable; for me, it would add to the emotional content to the poem.
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From The Cliffs. - by billy - 01-31-2013, 07:40 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Todd - 01-31-2013, 07:54 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 01-31-2013, 08:59 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by tectak - 02-01-2013, 02:49 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-01-2013, 05:40 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by shemthepenman - 02-01-2013, 06:41 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-01-2013, 07:19 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Keith - 02-01-2013, 08:28 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by shemthepenman - 02-01-2013, 09:28 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Mr. Shankly - 02-01-2013, 06:12 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-02-2013, 10:22 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by serge gurkski - 02-02-2013, 05:50 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-03-2013, 09:23 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Todd - 02-03-2013, 09:41 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by tectak - 02-03-2013, 07:53 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by serge gurkski - 02-03-2013, 08:13 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by heslopian - 02-06-2013, 08:02 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Keith - 02-07-2013, 06:04 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-07-2013, 05:32 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by tectak - 02-07-2013, 09:04 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by Stalker - 02-07-2013, 09:10 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by tectak - 02-08-2013, 12:13 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by serge gurkski - 02-08-2013, 01:22 AM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by serge gurkski - 02-07-2013, 09:19 PM
RE: From The Cliffs. - by billy - 02-08-2013, 07:02 AM
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