02-01-2013, 08:28 AM
Look what the tide brought in, dont know how I missed this but very glad I found it, this is definatley a keeper, I can feel the panic as the ship twist and cracks, great poem Billy.
(01-31-2013, 07:40 AM)billy Wrote: The mainsail died, they heard it rip great opening
dread ran like scurvy through the ship. real and pacey
They cut the rope that held the cloth could you say It instead of they meaning Dread made them do IT?
and dropped the tatters to the froth; this line feels funny could you have-and dropped like............... dont know what
all white and roaring o'er the deck,
a misplaced foot would break a neck.
The anchor lost, the boat's heart broke very strong and true
upon the granite, splintered oak. I can hear the crack great stuff
Some jumped too late, some leapt too soon
their buckled bodies bent and strewn
across the knife-edged rocks they lay
all cut and bloodied in the spray. all on the money for me
If your undies fer you've been smoking through em, don't peg em out