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[brandontoh]

I can see that you're trying to introduce some imageries, but the word choices are kind of weak. The idea itself is neat and really interesting, so you can try to replace words like 'minus six degrees', 'atomic bombs', and 'sadness freezes the eyes'. Those in my opinion can be improved rather simply. I'd go into a lot more detail, but I'm too tired at the moment. Good effort though, and thanks for the read. Hope I'm of help. =)