01-30-2013, 01:40 PM
Thank you again for commentary Pete and Heslopian.
In editing I've come up across exactly what you've described--heavy words disrupting the flow. Then I edited so much (basically adding narrative, trying to make idea more lucid) it might as well have been a different poem. Ahhh. We'll I've give it a few more days (to see if I can flesh anything out) then re-post.
In editing I've come up across exactly what you've described--heavy words disrupting the flow. Then I edited so much (basically adding narrative, trying to make idea more lucid) it might as well have been a different poem. Ahhh. We'll I've give it a few more days (to see if I can flesh anything out) then re-post.