Love Poem
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(01-26-2013, 04:05 AM)Stanton Wrote:  Hey guys,
this is my first English poem Wink Thanks for some feedback!!!

Story of Life

Heaven´s utmost creation, utmost doesn't fit too well
The most sensitive sensation,
The hardest to wield, the hardest it is to wield my own feelings concealed would be better (in my opinion)
One´s feelings concealed.

Off to find heaven´s chest,
No longer able to be self-possessed,
Human kind´s inherent quest,
No time to rest.

maybe it's just me but I can't make sense of this stanza too well

Fleeting, boundless, never-ending,
Thus, two people depending.
All in all, it's a nice poem, especially for a first Big Grin
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Messages In This Thread
Love Poem - by Stanton - 01-26-2013, 04:05 AM
RE: Love Poem - by rowens - 01-26-2013, 05:33 AM
RE: Love Poem - by Stanton - 01-26-2013, 06:38 AM
RE: Love Poem - by shemthepenman - 01-26-2013, 06:45 AM
RE: Love Poem - by rowens - 01-26-2013, 08:02 AM
RE: Love Poem - by billy - 01-26-2013, 04:57 PM
RE: Love Poem - by Pigler - 01-29-2013, 10:58 PM
RE: Love Poem - by Hidrolic - 01-30-2013, 12:32 PM
RE: Love Poem - by billy - 01-30-2013, 03:16 PM



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