A Place of Belief

[brandontoh]

Dolls pinned to trees
surround a patch of shallow graves, -- I think 'a' can be removed, but that's just me.
a clearing in which the gone now stay. -- I like this line a lot. Very nice rhythm to the stanza as a whole. It sets the scenery for the rest of the poem.

Their button eyes and thread smiles
hide a well of invisible power,
keeping away those rebel spirits
who tamper with the dead. -- The second line feels a little weak, which sort of drags down the stanza. My gripe is with "invisible power". Nothing a simple rewording won't fix. =)

I hold your hand and we,
two city effetes in powdered skin,
stand at the threshold of something primal. -- Good stanza. Then again, they all are. =x

I can almost hear a sentient wind
encircling this place, its voice a spastic blade:
"I'll tear your soul from your body
like chicken from bones".
The silent dolls do not reply, but keep their guard. -- Try to cut down some of the redundancies in this stanza. Billy has pointed out some already.

I raise your hand and kiss your mouth,
lightly pushing you against a tree.
All is darkness when the torch falls from my grip,
shutting off on impact. A cotton face sits beside yours. -- Beautiful imagery, but I think the structure could be tighter. I'd break 'A cotton face..." into another line, and the 'the' from line 3 can be removed.

Overall a very enjoyable read. =) I like the imagery and the poetic language used. Remember, all is personal opinion. =x So take what you will. Hope I'm of help. =D