01-27-2013, 04:06 PM
why all the backslashes?
ash pointed out about the grammar and missed be in the last line.
the end rhymes aren't as good as they could be. (if they are end rhymes)
the poem is indicative of our times, though it feels more like a statement than the converse of the 1st line.
good effort.
ash pointed out about the grammar and missed be in the last line.
the end rhymes aren't as good as they could be. (if they are end rhymes)
the poem is indicative of our times, though it feels more like a statement than the converse of the 1st line.
good effort.