01-27-2013, 02:54 PM
Hiya Josh, you have a really interesting concept here. Your poem seems to be about hope and desperation in equal measure, with that giant glass house being the confines of society or cultural ideals (at least that's how it sounds to me!)
there's is a contraction, so you need an apostrophe.
I like that you've started and finished on the same image, with a little bit of a twist. I tend to think your poem gets a bit bogged down with all the repetition in the middle, but it's a good start
there's is a contraction, so you need an apostrophe.
I like that you've started and finished on the same image, with a little bit of a twist. I tend to think your poem gets a bit bogged down with all the repetition in the middle, but it's a good start
It could be worse