guilt
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I really enjoyed this, although I do feel it lost some of its strength towards the end. Everything up until "Empty as these rooms" seems really strong, after that line it got a little cumbersome. I would think about revising and trying to make the end as concise as the beginning, which has a beautiful starkness.
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guilt - by corawrites - 01-21-2013, 02:58 PM
RE: guilt - by doolasmind#11 - 01-21-2013, 03:10 PM
RE: guilt - by Air - 01-21-2013, 03:27 PM
RE: guilt - by billy - 01-21-2013, 03:42 PM
RE: guilt - by cidermaid - 01-21-2013, 04:35 PM
RE: guilt - by Jagger Cyde - 01-22-2013, 10:55 AM
RE: guilt - by Pryderi - 01-27-2013, 09:32 AM



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