01-25-2013, 01:17 AM
This part sounds a little off, just a bit clumsy. But at the same time, I've heard people say it a lot, "shot to sky":
"in denser air we shot to sky"...
And this, too, even though I like it. The wording feels cluttered:
"that blood has spilled to name just sand"...
A poem like this makes me excited and jealous; because I used to read Saint-Exupery late at night, and think about flying airplanes, and making strange night deliveries to isolated airbases. But then I never even learned to drive a car properly.
"in denser air we shot to sky"...
And this, too, even though I like it. The wording feels cluttered:
"that blood has spilled to name just sand"...
A poem like this makes me excited and jealous; because I used to read Saint-Exupery late at night, and think about flying airplanes, and making strange night deliveries to isolated airbases. But then I never even learned to drive a car properly.