A small poem
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I agree with the fact that you should try not to use too many ellipses. Personally when I'm trying to create a pause in between words, which I feel you are trying to do, I find it better to split them between lines (I'm no expert though). All in all I found it to be quite a beautiful poem and my day feels but a bit brighter after reading it Smile
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A small poem - by jo_poems - 01-23-2013, 03:20 PM
RE: A small poem - by brandontoh - 01-23-2013, 03:28 PM
RE: A small poem - by jo_poems - 01-23-2013, 03:39 PM
RE: A small poem - by noheart - 01-24-2013, 07:05 AM
RE: A small poem - by jo_poems - 01-24-2013, 06:36 PM



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