01-23-2013, 12:38 PM
Quote:i really like this so sorry if i wrote a alot lol, well i know it seems like a lot but it is just minor easily fixable stuff and based on your previous writings i think you go it. like i said this piece is really good and i think it has a lot of potential...keep working hope to see the revision soon
Your crit is exactly what I was hoping for, because I know the poem needs work but I've been unsure of how to improve it. Thanks for reading and thanks for the help (: