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Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision)

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01-23-2013, 07:51 AM

(01-23-2013, 07:32 AM)svanhoeven Wrote: I guess I need to figure out when to call it quits and move on.

Serge, I saw the same thing and already changed that in my local version to:

...Men bathed
the orange embers with a meager stream,
But their neglect had spawned a horrid loop-
...

Yep, time to call it done and move on to the next set of lessons.

Didn't see that. Sorry. ("their neglect" is good)

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Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-17-2013, 06:54 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster - by Keith - 01-18-2013, 08:55 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster - by svanhoeven - 01-19-2013, 02:11 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster - by earlymorningnoises - 01-18-2013, 11:48 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by Todd - 01-19-2013, 03:28 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-19-2013, 05:55 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by Todd - 01-19-2013, 06:04 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by serge gurkski - 01-19-2013, 06:21 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-19-2013, 06:37 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by Todd - 01-19-2013, 06:54 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by serge gurkski - 01-19-2013, 06:46 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-19-2013, 07:09 AM

RE: Texas City Disaster (1st Revision) - by Todd - 01-19-2013, 07:18 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-20-2013, 07:13 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by billy - 01-20-2013, 11:59 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-20-2013, 01:29 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Todd - 01-20-2013, 12:19 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Leanne - 01-20-2013, 01:55 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-20-2013, 02:52 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by billy - 01-20-2013, 01:59 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Leanne - 01-20-2013, 03:10 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-21-2013, 12:25 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by billy - 01-20-2013, 03:10 PM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Leanne - 01-21-2013, 05:33 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-23-2013, 07:02 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Todd - 01-23-2013, 07:08 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by Leanne - 01-23-2013, 07:12 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by serge gurkski - 01-23-2013, 07:22 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-23-2013, 07:32 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by serge gurkski - 01-23-2013, 07:51 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by billy - 01-23-2013, 07:37 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by svanhoeven - 01-23-2013, 07:41 AM

RE: Disaster on the SS Grandcamp (2nd Revision) - by billy - 01-23-2013, 07:46 AM

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