First poem ever!

[burka]

burka: hello, how are things?
I have to say, for a first attempt this is really good. I like the title and the poem that follows. I get your meaning, so all in all, good job keep it up

hello, things are great thanks, yourself?

thank you so much, that means a lot !

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I like it, but it seems as if you should combine a lot of lines.

Thank you, I'll have a look at the structure, but I feel I should explain my reasons for writing it this way; yesterday I was told a close family friend of mine (I think of him as more of a relative though) was diagnosed with cancer and that his chances of beating it were slim and as you can imagine, this was quite a shock. He has always been a healthy, lively person, so to hear this shook me quite a bit. However, I have always believed to be diagnosed with something and have time to say your goodbyes etc is far better than to die suddenly and unexpectedly. So I wanted to show the feelings of shock and confusion that come with dealing with death and everything surrounding it, because even though I'm sort of relieved he has this time left to do what he wants to do, there really is no good way for someone close to you to go. I hope that explains it a bit and that it made sense.