01-22-2013, 05:46 AM
Okay guys, updated version with punctuation and fixed grammar (I think):
Like a drop in its delicate descent
towards the rigid ground;
a mountain top, which never bends
thick and rarely downed.
A rose, so grand and pliant,
deflective in the wind,
yet the roots defiant
the flower's core rescind.
Prowess to speak, declare,
around her breaks and cracks.
Set ablaze, a potent flare,
daring, by much lacks.
Knees shake and shoulders shiver.
All thoughts depart.
Like a leaf into a river
by the fast-paced beat of my heart.
In her presence, a mind obtuse
and courage chooses to abscond.
Reason proclaims that it's no use
but heart, near stars and far beyond.
For her, sentiment I now assert
with line and word,
as my mouth may distort
but my writing remains unblurred.
For her, that stirs up my emotions
and makes my heart race like a drop;
she, who controls my notions
and is in my thoughts non-stop.
A question, now, about to follow
for you, a girl divine.
Your hand, may I borrow
on this year's Valentine?
Like a drop in its delicate descent
towards the rigid ground;
a mountain top, which never bends
thick and rarely downed.
A rose, so grand and pliant,
deflective in the wind,
yet the roots defiant
the flower's core rescind.
Prowess to speak, declare,
around her breaks and cracks.
Set ablaze, a potent flare,
daring, by much lacks.
Knees shake and shoulders shiver.
All thoughts depart.
Like a leaf into a river
by the fast-paced beat of my heart.
In her presence, a mind obtuse
and courage chooses to abscond.
Reason proclaims that it's no use
but heart, near stars and far beyond.
For her, sentiment I now assert
with line and word,
as my mouth may distort
but my writing remains unblurred.
For her, that stirs up my emotions
and makes my heart race like a drop;
she, who controls my notions
and is in my thoughts non-stop.
A question, now, about to follow
for you, a girl divine.
Your hand, may I borrow
on this year's Valentine?