First poem ever!
#3
I noticed the repetition of time shortly after posting this actually, changed it to:

and just a little
while,
because to leave
everything and
everyone behind
with no time for
“remember when”

I'll have a think about the structure too, thank you Smile!
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First poem ever! - by burka - 01-22-2013, 03:20 AM
RE: First poem ever! - by corawrites - 01-22-2013, 04:08 AM
RE: First poem ever! - by burka - 01-22-2013, 04:37 AM
RE: First poem ever! - by Jae Mc Donnell - 01-22-2013, 05:01 AM
RE: First poem ever! - by burka - 01-23-2013, 07:26 AM
RE: First poem ever! - by Jagger Cyde - 01-22-2013, 05:58 AM



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