01-22-2013, 04:08 AM
It's rather choppy so I suggest working on the format, additionally:
and just a little
time,
because to leave
everything and
everyone behind
with no time for
"remember that time"
There's a word here that gets a bit repetitive.
Good effort for your first poem though
and just a little
time,
because to leave
everything and
everyone behind
with no time for
"remember that time"
There's a word here that gets a bit repetitive.
Good effort for your first poem though