01-22-2013, 02:30 AM
Quote:I have never taken pills, but i often try to imagine. i like cigs. smoking makes my mind feel like one, and its things like smoking than can help me imagine what some pharmitueicals are like.
Are you trying to portray the effects of the drugs themselves, or just the desire to take them? Seems like it starts with the second, then drifts to the first.
If you want to portray the effects, then my opinion is if you've never taken mind-altering pills, I'm not sure you'll be able to get very far with the imagery. If you mean stimulants, like cigarettes, sure. I've never taken mind-altering substances for recreational purposes, but when I was in my mid-twenties I had a near-fatal illness that put me in the hospital for a month. For the first two weeks of it, I was in an induced coma. When they withdrew the drugs keeping me in the coma, for a few days my mind was in a state that I could not have described before experiencing it.
To be brief, I'll give you one example. I could see that I was in the hospital, but since I had retrograde amnesia from the sedative, I couldn't remember why I was there. I knew that I could barely move. I couldn't lift an arm or leg. So using the queer logic that the drugs imparted to me, I concluded that I had somehow gained a thousand extra pounds and had become morbidly obese. You know, one of those shut-ins where they have to knock down a wall and use a forklift and flatbed truck to get them to the hospital. In fact, I had been in a coma for two weeks so all my muscles had atrophied. Many other bizarre, unpredictable thoughts and theories came to me depending on what the nurses were doing, or what was on the TV.
So I guess what I'm saying is maybe you should stick with describing the desire to take the pills. The last stanza doesn't really cut it for me.
Disclaimer: I am in no way suggesting that mind-altering substances be consumed for the benefit of future revisions.
