Takla makan

Takla makan

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#16

01-21-2013, 05:36 PM

Hi Serge,
Think the edit has pulled it together and improved the end dramatically. (Also, although i had not mentioned it, I was not a fan of the opening word and think this the subtraction [if that is the right word] is better).
Sorry still don't like the use of oxytocin but as i'm in a minority will shut up about it. Big Grin

Good edit. Good poem.

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Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-19-2013, 08:05 AM

RE: Takla makan - by rowens - 01-20-2013, 12:10 AM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-20-2013, 01:18 AM

RE: Takla makan - by rowens - 01-20-2013, 01:22 AM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-20-2013, 01:24 AM

RE: Takla makan - by tectak - 01-20-2013, 01:28 AM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-20-2013, 01:33 AM

RE: Takla makan - by Stalker - 01-20-2013, 02:07 AM

RE: Takla makan - by cidermaid - 01-20-2013, 02:43 AM

RE: Takla makan - by Stalker - 01-20-2013, 02:46 AM

RE: Takla makan - by cidermaid - 01-20-2013, 03:06 AM

RE: Takla makan - by Stalker - 01-20-2013, 03:08 AM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-20-2013, 06:04 AM

RE: Takla makan - by shemthepenman - 01-21-2013, 12:28 AM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-21-2013, 05:18 PM

RE: Takla makan - by cidermaid - 01-21-2013, 05:36 PM

RE: Takla makan - by serge gurkski - 01-21-2013, 05:43 PM

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