01-21-2013, 04:30 PM
possibly change "cure all my pains" to "clean off my shame." That would be more consistent with the ocean metaphor also.
EDIT: I misread what you were saying, Ive gotta change the first stanza to match the "i"
I'm going to go back and push forward the ocean metaphor, and extend the idea little bit too.
EDIT: I misread what you were saying, Ive gotta change the first stanza to match the "i"
I'm going to go back and push forward the ocean metaphor, and extend the idea little bit too.