two minute poem

[arbil_poieo]

cheers Ash
haha you should try it then.


I've given it another whirl anyway (see the edit).

I've tried, I just end up with emo crap or something that doesn't make sense. If there was a place for "crap poetry" here I would post them proudly.

Is this finished? I like "pinprick mind" and "gardens of lines"
I have no idea what it means, but I like poetry with layers. It's like reading something over and over and every time discovering something new about it. You have some really good images that I have to pay close attention to and hope to wrap my head around. Did the rest take 2 minutes?