01-21-2013, 01:12 AM
(01-20-2013, 09:57 PM)sar Wrote: The language strikes me as being, overall, juvenile.Perhaps you are right....but could you say why? In an adult way, of course.
I will adjust to suit if you make a good case but this kind of crit says very little of consequence and I am very open to serious suggestions.
Best and thank you,
tectak

