01-21-2013, 12:41 AM
I was thinking that "lack" would be better. Since "lacks" is usually used as in "He lacks this or that." And it doesn't work well here.
And the first stanza goes from the "drop" to the "mountain" with no punctuation: so at first, you think they have something to do with each other. Rain falling, a tear falling, on or near the mountain? You read it a few times and you see that it's two different subjects altogether, the "drop" and the "mountain". A person can never bend with their feelings, but fall down sometimes; but the mountain part gets in the way.
And the first stanza goes from the "drop" to the "mountain" with no punctuation: so at first, you think they have something to do with each other. Rain falling, a tear falling, on or near the mountain? You read it a few times and you see that it's two different subjects altogether, the "drop" and the "mountain". A person can never bend with their feelings, but fall down sometimes; but the mountain part gets in the way.