01-20-2013, 03:10 PM
Drunkenly is more of dactyl: DRUNK en ly -- the 3rd syllable is stressed SLIGHTLY more than the second, but not really enough to drive the meter without a little bump. The stress alters depending on the words around it. As it is now, to say it with the meter I'm required to depress the "drunk" part of the word slightly to get it to even out. It is a very small scansion issue and most people wouldn't even notice it. I do only because that's my job 
As I said, it works now, it's just not as perfect as I like things to be... but I'm terribly anal about this kind of thing.
"twists" is good.
I don't have an issue with "peering out" from a dialect point of view -- we're just as likely to say that here as well. It's only a slight sonic hiccup to my ear. As I said, I'm terribly anal about this kind of thing...
As I said, it works now, it's just not as perfect as I like things to be... but I'm terribly anal about this kind of thing.
"twists" is good.
I don't have an issue with "peering out" from a dialect point of view -- we're just as likely to say that here as well. It's only a slight sonic hiccup to my ear. As I said, I'm terribly anal about this kind of thing...
It could be worse