Nursery

[Todd]

Hi, As I read your poem, I thought the speaker is an animal. That's great, I love that. There are things in there though that an animal wouldn't understand. I feel like I'm being told a lot of things and given a context that an animal wouldn't be able to give me. Chewing metal bars good. In feces, I care an animal might not. A lot of moments like that. It's a good idea. It just feels like the execution needs to be focused more. This can be an issue with charged subjects. They have a lot to live up to.

Just my thoughts,

Todd