01-19-2013, 02:15 AM
I like the tone you were going for. I'm very affected by seasons and weather. It just doesn't have a kick that I feel it needs. These lines,
Winter is Death and Fall is Man
And it comes for you and me,
seem to me like you took a turn before you were about to come to the verge of something. What is that something? Well it's still a ways a way, and I don't want to put words in your mouth.
But the rhythm was ok most the way through.
Winter is Death and Fall is Man
And it comes for you and me,
seem to me like you took a turn before you were about to come to the verge of something. What is that something? Well it's still a ways a way, and I don't want to put words in your mouth.
But the rhythm was ok most the way through.