Loving Apart edit 2 shem

[tectak]

em... 'profound' was possibly the wrong choice of word on my part (oh dear, choosing the wrong word to advise someone they may have chosen the wrong word; I need more practice at this. I suppose, I meant 'grand' or something like that. well, anyhow, the phrases and words I indicated felt a little spiky for a love poem. But, you say wrong category and indeed, that is what I was clumsily trying to say.
also, just a note, I am not so opposed to profundity or 'esoteric manifestations'; but i think they must be done well (either in secret or so obviously that they rattle).
ps. I would like to read that short story.

Vanity, vanity.....just google One Breath for Helen.
Thanks again,
tectak