01-18-2013, 04:35 AM
While I like the way the poem is structured, I found the punctuation to be an interference in the flow of this poem, which made it a little awkward to read.
Additionally, I personally found the first and third stanzas to be the strongest. The second stanza is by no means "bad", but if you were to isolate it and let it stand on its own it would seem rather prosaic.
Additionally, I personally found the first and third stanzas to be the strongest. The second stanza is by no means "bad", but if you were to isolate it and let it stand on its own it would seem rather prosaic.