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[monablackbird]

Lots of haunting emotion here and it takes courage to put that into the world. So already, well done. Reminds me of a friend of mine who's living through something like this. Anyway, yes there are some cliches here. And the problem thing with cliches is not the emotion itself that's being conveyed but *how* it's being conveyed. Think about ways to say someone cried a lot without the word tears and see what you can come up with. I know it's hard to bypass emotions (if this is coming from you personally which I certainly don't want to assume) and polish something up so it might even do you better to put it away for a while and tend to it later. Then again, you may find you don't need it anymore. All the best and keep writing!