The Box
#7
There's a much better flow now I think. That last line is a tough one still. I'm torn by whether or not it should rhyme like the rest of the poem. Well done overall and I would keep thinking about that last line before you call this one done.
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The Box - by Fathima - 01-15-2013, 10:59 AM
RE: The Box - by arbil_poieo - 01-15-2013, 01:34 PM
RE: The Box - by monablackbird - 01-15-2013, 10:23 PM
RE: The Box - by Fathima - 01-16-2013, 07:18 AM
RE: The Box - by arbil_poieo - 01-16-2013, 09:37 AM
RE: The Box - by jferrell - 01-16-2013, 09:55 AM
RE: The Box - by monablackbird - 01-16-2013, 11:28 PM



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