Haunted by Jellyfish

Haunted by Jellyfish

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01-16-2013, 09:08 PM

Thanks Billy! You're sort of on the right track as to the meaning but there's still something in there I thought the males would spot that hasn't been mentioned. Wink

Made a bit of an edit for meter which works out to a rhythm of 5/6/7/5 for each stanza. Definitely seems to have more of a flow. I think. What do you guys think?

Thanks again!
Mona

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Haunted by Jellyfish - by monablackbird - 01-15-2013, 10:44 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by Todd - 01-15-2013, 11:06 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by monablackbird - 01-15-2013, 11:33 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by billy - 01-16-2013, 06:01 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by monablackbird - 01-16-2013, 09:08 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by Todd - 01-16-2013, 09:11 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by monablackbird - 01-16-2013, 09:30 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by Todd - 01-16-2013, 09:35 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by monablackbird - 01-16-2013, 09:38 PM

RE: Long Autumn’s Shore - by Todd - 01-16-2013, 10:14 PM