01-16-2013, 09:37 AM
Hey Fathima,
The last two lines broke your rhyme so maybe it will help to redo these with the same intention as you have already, that goes along with the rhyme you have in the rest of the poem.
I think the edit is good so far and it's a poem worth the the attention.
The last two lines broke your rhyme so maybe it will help to redo these with the same intention as you have already, that goes along with the rhyme you have in the rest of the poem.
I think the edit is good so far and it's a poem worth the the attention.