01-15-2013, 01:42 PM
Hey Joe,
I like how you wrote this, he's sad but also unselfish when it comes to his friends in wanting what's best for them.
"dear friends
i hope the wind fills your sail
to carry to hopeful shores
and maybe you could catch a glimpse
of a lone statue against a horizon
from over your shoulder."
I like how you tied all this together in the last stanza, a very strong ending.
I like how you wrote this, he's sad but also unselfish when it comes to his friends in wanting what's best for them.
"dear friends
i hope the wind fills your sail
to carry to hopeful shores
and maybe you could catch a glimpse
of a lone statue against a horizon
from over your shoulder."
I like how you tied all this together in the last stanza, a very strong ending.