01-15-2013, 12:32 AM
FYI Billy, I put the poem in a text editor to look at a revision without all the initial caps on each line, with caps only at the beginning of sentences.
It looked kind of funky to me, maybe because the caps have been in there since I started on it. Another thing that made it look strange is that some of the enjambment runs between stanzas, so there would be a cap by itself in the middle of a stanza. Even though I've tried to make the language less archaic, the form on the page still looks archaic. I like that, so I'm going to stick with the caps.
It looked kind of funky to me, maybe because the caps have been in there since I started on it. Another thing that made it look strange is that some of the enjambment runs between stanzas, so there would be a cap by itself in the middle of a stanza. Even though I've tried to make the language less archaic, the form on the page still looks archaic. I like that, so I'm going to stick with the caps.