The Recitation
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Hey Fathima

I think more fundamentally you can look at some punctuation and try to reduce the number of verbs which end in - ing.


Thsi is like a long line, stream of conciousness thing at the moment - and everything ih happening RIGHT NOW.



does that help?

StalkeR
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Messages In This Thread
The Recitation - by Fathima - 01-13-2013, 05:30 PM
RE: The Recitation - by Card - 01-13-2013, 05:56 PM
RE: The Recitation - by Stalker - 01-13-2013, 07:25 PM
RE: The Recitation - by rowens - 01-14-2013, 01:36 AM
RE: The Recitation - by monablackbird - 01-16-2013, 01:08 AM
RE: The Recitation - by Fathima - 01-17-2013, 11:10 AM
RE: The Recitation - by arbil_poieo - 01-17-2013, 12:50 PM
RE: The Recitation - by Card - 01-18-2013, 03:07 AM
RE: The Recitation - by Fathima - 01-18-2013, 12:43 PM



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