01-13-2013, 05:30 PM
I don't know if this poem even makes sense. I find that I have some difficult writing figuratively and using imagery in poems. I tried to do this in this poem, but I'm not sure if it works. Any advice on how to better this poem would be highly appreciated...Thank you. 
Words penetrating dark to light veins
Butterflies flying through polluted to purified skin
Heart fluttering from the still to leaping breast
Chanting, singing harmonious melodies
Nothing can taste and compare to
Recited rhythmical sweet tender words
Soul bouncing back and forth away
In a molded muddy container
Raising up trembling sweaty palms
Supplicating with earnest blue sincerity
Such words are not from this man-altered earth
Tears flowing like rivers in the rich green garden
Wanting to depart and exit this body now
Indulge in these words
Most Merciful, You have captured me away
I'm encompassed by mighty feathered white wings
I'm swiftly flying to the seven heavenly skies above
Words penetrating dark to light veins
Butterflies flying through polluted to purified skin
Heart fluttering from the still to leaping breast
Chanting, singing harmonious melodies
Nothing can taste and compare to
Recited rhythmical sweet tender words
Soul bouncing back and forth away
In a molded muddy container
Raising up trembling sweaty palms
Supplicating with earnest blue sincerity
Such words are not from this man-altered earth
Tears flowing like rivers in the rich green garden
Wanting to depart and exit this body now
Indulge in these words
Most Merciful, You have captured me away
I'm encompassed by mighty feathered white wings
I'm swiftly flying to the seven heavenly skies above