01-12-2013, 09:54 PM
This is fantastic. I must confess that finding/using so many rhymes with Art/Heart could have seemed strained or forced, but each one is apt and perfectly placed.
I cannot fault it in terms of technique. In which case, this won't be much of a critique (note to self: must stop talking in rhyme)
Having a degree in philosophy, I am always happy to see the old dusties resurrected in poetry. However, I was unsure whether the thread was continued throughout the poem. S2-3-4-6 all seem to explicitly refer to Descartes, but S1-5 seem to abandon the connection, unless I am missing something (possibly something historical).
Anyhow, this is by-the-by because it is a great poem. I don't know why (and I'll probably regret saying this) but it's like in poetry what samiyam is doing with music.
thanks.
I cannot fault it in terms of technique. In which case, this won't be much of a critique (note to self: must stop talking in rhyme)
Having a degree in philosophy, I am always happy to see the old dusties resurrected in poetry. However, I was unsure whether the thread was continued throughout the poem. S2-3-4-6 all seem to explicitly refer to Descartes, but S1-5 seem to abandon the connection, unless I am missing something (possibly something historical).
Anyhow, this is by-the-by because it is a great poem. I don't know why (and I'll probably regret saying this) but it's like in poetry what samiyam is doing with music.
thanks.