i think it's looking good so far except i'm still struggling with the luc bat
here's what i found about it's rhyme scheme;
The grand untarnished sea6 -
How glorious for me6 and you8
To wander as we do6
Along its beach and through6 the tide!8
How can I harbor pride6
Now walking here beside6 the shore?8
Can you, my love, ignore6
The sigh, forevermore6 to dwell
Within our glassy shell?
The gleaming stars, which fell to earth -
What was their glory worth
Beside the gentle birth of life?
What need have we for strife?
The two of us, dear wife, are free!
here's what i found about it's rhyme scheme;
The grand untarnished sea6 -
How glorious for me6 and you8
To wander as we do6
Along its beach and through6 the tide!8
How can I harbor pride6
Now walking here beside6 the shore?8
Can you, my love, ignore6
The sigh, forevermore6 to dwell
Within our glassy shell?
The gleaming stars, which fell to earth -
What was their glory worth
Beside the gentle birth of life?
What need have we for strife?
The two of us, dear wife, are free!