01-11-2013, 02:21 PM
I stare at the ceiling- a blank slate. Its vacancy quickly filled-either by heart or mind
That line, was so beautiful. I agree with the previous comment that, this poem really captured loneliness. Longing. Some mistakes with grammar, but, all in all, I enjoyed the feeling in this poem. (I'm new, my feedback will get better, lol)
That line, was so beautiful. I agree with the previous comment that, this poem really captured loneliness. Longing. Some mistakes with grammar, but, all in all, I enjoyed the feeling in this poem. (I'm new, my feedback will get better, lol)